Group 3,
Students: SANTIAGO, ANGELA, FAS
Text: (blue
is your mistakes, red is my corrections)
1)
Once upon a time an alone girl a girl on her own / a lonely girl who want wanted to get a date with someone, then
she looked for someone on facebook and she got the
number of a guy who she did not know but she thought that he was pretty for to have a date so she called him.
He thought that it was very embarrassing because he did not know anything about
her, however he accepted the invitation.
2)
he went out to meet with the girl in a pub, NEW SENTENCE OR "but" unfortunately he forgot
something important
3)
so he stopped in front of a chemist
store and then he bought some condoms so he ran quickly to the date
4)
he felt ashamed because the seller was his grandmother
5)
he didn't say that he needed some condoms he got a
pill for the a headache
6)
his grandfather got angry with him because he didn't
have money for to
pay for the pill, "his grandfather
screamed him, "get a job"
7)
so he said that he was look looking for condoms because he had a
date with a cute girl
8)
his grandfather gave him some condoms just if he had enough money to
pay them His grandfather said
that he would only give him some condoms if he had enough money to pay them.
9)
so he was so happy because he got the condoms
10)
he was on him way to see his date while he was
listening to music.
11)
he arrived excited and anxious, NEW SENTENCE OR "and" he rang the bell
12)
he realised that his date was with his grandfather at
home, NEW SENTENCE OR "because" she wanted to had have a date with 2 guys
13)
he wanted to have a date with that girl so he called
his grandmother and he told her that he his grandfather cheated with someone
else
Good work!